Fluent Essays

THE INSTRUCTIONS ARE BELOW AND I HAVE ATTACHED A WORD DOC THAT SAYS ROUGH DRAFT WHICH IS WHERE I HAVE ALREADY STARTED PUTTING IN SOME INFO,PLEASE FILL IN LAST 2 POINTS AND THEN WRITE THE ROUGH DRAFT PAPER. I HAVE ALSO ATACHED A WORD DOC THAT SAYS ROUGH DRAFT EXAMPLE, THIS IS HOW THE ASSIGNEMNT NEEDS TO BE COMPLETED. DONT FORGET MLA CITIATION AND ALSO THIS ESSAY IS ABOUT GIGI BRYANT AND HER LIFE AND INFLUENCE SHE HAD AND THE HELICOPTER CRASH. LOTS TO FIND ABOUT IT ALL OVER THE INTERNET.This week youll be working on your rough draft for a narrative short story. Yes, you have written one already this year. However, to make sure your prepare for 10th grade, knowing how to use the elements of literature , and how structure a short story with great ideas with using good use of language we are going to write another short story. Next week, you will edit your rough draft with a peer or parent. Ways which you can do this-Zoom with your friend, share your google docs with peer, have your parents look at it.Assignment1. Set up google docs. MLA format, Tittle your document Rough draft Short Story 2. 2. Use a plot diagram (page 97) to organize your writing (yes, its required). You may use your own graphic organizer, just make sure it has all the components. You will turn this in with your final draft.3. Directions for short story:Write a new original short story from real or imagined experiences or events. Your story must include a variety of narrative techniques- such as foreshadowing, point of view, figurative language, imagery, symbolism, and/or irony-as well as effective details and a well-structured sequence of events.If you want to review the unit in Springboard it starts on page 96.Short Story should not be longer than 3 pages. Heres the rubric (grade scale) for the short story.Rubric short story Common Core State Standard.docx rough_draft_start.docx rough_draft_example.docx Unformatted Attachment Preview Cedric Hill Ela outline draft Characters: Deshawn‘s family ● DeShawn ● Deborah ( mom ) ● DeAndre ( little brother ) ● ● ● ● ● Deshawn‘s new family friend the Hall’s Nia ( cheerleader, DeShawn new girlfriend ) Jordan ( Family friend brother ) Jasmin ( Family friend sister ) Julia ( Family friend mom lawyer) Xavier ( Family friend dad and Coach Hall ) Time: ● Senior year Place: ● Edgewood, Florida ● Jacksonville, Florida Narrative hook: ● DeShawn is one of the best football players in high school. He got a scholarship in Jacksonville. He can only get the scholarship if he played for Jacksonville school. He doesn’t wanna leave his mom or brother behind. Rising action: ● He moves to Jacksonville with the Hall’s ● Trying to fit in with the rich people ● Working hard with football to keep his scholarship open and to keep his family happy ● They are going to play the Championship game and hoping that all DeShawn’s work has finally paid off. ● Jasmin, Jordan, Nia and DeShawn went to a party to celebrate the football teams Championship win Climax: ● After the party DeShawn was going home with Jasmin and there was someone shooting at them. DeShawn was protecting Jasmin and DeShawn got shot. Falling action: ● DeShawn had to make a hard life choice at the hospital and he decided to do surgery ● DeShawn went home with his family and practiced running for football and things he could do while he’s recovering like going over the plays ● DeShawn got stronger and stronger as they days went on, he wanted to play in the next big game nothing could stop him and he did That discussion was important because… ● With determination you can do anything even when something bad happens Cedric Hill Ela Mrs. Clairmont 4/26/2019 DeShawn’s Dream I’m DeShawn, I’m one of the best players in my high school. My position is the quarterback, I’ve been playing since I was little. My dad taught me how to play but then he left my mom and I. My dad left when I was ten. My brother DeAndre was on the way after my dad left. I kept thinking it was my fault that he left me and that made me angry, but that anger made me a one good football player. Years later... One day, I came home from football practice and I got the mail, I couldn’t believe what I saw. It was a scholarship to the Jacksonville Jaguars football team. I read the papers and it said that I would have to live and go to school at Jacksonville. I couldn’t tell my mom or brother just then, I’ll tell them at dinner. I hid the letter so my mom wouldn’t see it, and I got ready for dinner. I smelt the fresh cornbread and the barbecue chicken that just came off the grill. We sat down at the table and I was just about to tell them the good news. Then the doorbell rang. I went to answer the door and this guy was standing there and he said his name was Xavier Hall. Xavier Hall said “ I am the coach at Jacksonville high school, May I come in.” I was extremely nice but assertive because I needed to get in this school and we didn’t have enough money. I asked him “ Do you want me to call you Coach Hall and do you want to stay for dinner ?” He said “ Yes DeShawn you can call me Coach or Coach Hall and yes I’ll stay for dinner. Coach and I sat down at the table and my mom got his plate ready. My mom knew Coach Hall and they went to high school together. They talked a lot to catch up. I stopped them and told my family what I got in the mail today. My mom was so happy she even started to cry. She said “ My little man all grown up is going to be a famous football star. I want you to go and live your dream DeShawn. I want what’s best for you.” I asked her “ what about the money and what about you and DeAndre.” My mom cut me off and said “ We will be fine, don’t worry about us.” I went to DeAndre, he was so happy that his big brother was going to be in the NFL when he graduates. The one thing he said was “ Don’t forget about mom and I” I told DeAndre I would never forget about him and mom.” I was wondering how I am going to stay in Jacksonville. Coach had some good news, and he said “DeShawn you can stay with my family and I in Jacksonville and you’ll be able to sleepover on the weekends.” I was so happy that I could go to Jacksonville and see my family. I asked Coach Hill “ When do I get to go to Jacksonville and when do I get registered for school?” Coach Hill said “ We already have you registered for school because I got mail that said the same thing you have. You can leave anytime on Sunday. Ill let you spend the weekend here.” I shook Coachs hand and walked him out and said “ I’ll see you Sunday night.” As Coach left, I told my mom and my brother when I was leaving. I did as much as I could that weekend with them. My brother helped me pack my stuff on Sunday. I had my last regular dinner with my family. My mom kissed me goodbye and gave me a hug. I hugged my little brother goodbye and told him to help mom and don’t give her any trouble. I left the house and I was on my way to the Hill’s and to change my life. When I got to Jacksonville it was like a totally different place. There were no bars on the windows and no thugs on the street. Instead there were people waving at me and smiling and I didn’t even know them. I got to the Hill’s house and their house looked like a mansion, well in my eyes it did. I walked up to the door and I was super nervous. I was over thinking that they weren’t going to like me. I rang the doorbell and they didn’t answer the first time. I thought to myself what if they forgot or what if it’s the wrong house. I rang it again and they answered she said “Hi my name is Jasmin and my brother Jordan should be down to help with the other bags, but here let me help with those and I’ll show you to your room. Jordan came out of his room and said hey I’ll get your bags. I got to my room and it was huge. I have a king size bed, a walk-in closet, my own flat screen Tv. I wasn’t used to this at all. I was so shocked. Jordan came in and saw my face and he said “ Yeah we cleaned it. I hope you like it.” I shook my head and I was speechless. As Jordan left my room I started to put my clothes away and there was a knock on my door and I turned around and it was Mrs. Hall. I straightened up and said “Hi Mrs. Hall thank you for letting me stay here. I really appreciate this is a miracle for me.” She said “ Your welcome you can stay as long as you need, I’ll leave you alone I can see your busy I’ll see you tomorrow morning” Once Mrs. Hall left I finished hanging up my clothes and then I was getting ready for bed. The next morning I got up and ready for school. I thought to myself how am I going to fit in at this school. It’s a bunch of spoiled rich kids and I’m a “ ghetto ” guy that has to work hard to get something that I want. I snapped out of it and put some good thoughts in my head and hopefully that will get me through the day. I walked down stairs and there was everyone getting breakfast prepared, I told them they should’ve woke me up earlier so I could help them out. Jasmin said “ this is your first time here first impressions count for everything, and trust me you will get to help a lot. So we all eat breakfast together and Coach, Jordans, Jasmine and I all head to school. Mrs Hall heads to her law firm business. As I approached the school I got more and more nervous. I kept on checking just to make sure I had everything and I did everytime. I finally got out of the car and walked into school. Everyone was staring at me. I felt very uncomfortable. So uncomfortable I ran into the prettiest and smartest girl I ever did see. I helped her with the things she dropped and we got to talk a lot. Her name is Nia and she’s a cheerleader and likes to watch football. I saw Jordan with the football team and I told Nia we should go on a date. She said yes! I was happy and she saw that. I told her I see you later and I’ll call you. I finally got to meet the whole football team. They treated me like I was one of them, part of the family. After school I went to football practice. I worked hard and stayed back an hour longer than the other guys. I kept in mind I had a date, so I left and got ready to go pick up Nia. She looked gorgeous. I took her home and she had fun and so did I. That was a good first day. Months later… My life has definitely changed over the last couple months. I’m still living with the Hill’s and they have been so good to me. They have been treating me like their own kid. I have a new girlfriend, Nia. Weve been dating since the first date. I’ve been working super hard to please my family even though I already do. I’ve been working so hard with longer practice and lifting weights. The team and I have a championship game today. We’ve been practicing so hard and so has Nia. My mom, my brother, and some friends from my old school are coming to my championship game. The game begins and so far so good. Later in the game, they are beating us by five points and we have five minutes left. We have two plays that could make us win. I told Jordan that we should do those two plays and we did. We made two touchdowns! The crowd went wild. After that game I couldn’t have been happier everything was looking up. Jasmin, Nia,Jordan and I went to a party to celebrate the championship win. The party was in my neighborhood “the ghetto”. An hour goes by and Jasmin wants to go home and so do I. So I told everyone I was leaving and I took Jasmin home with me. I knew it was a bad neighborhood so I walked her to her car. Just then I didn’t know my life was going to change so dramatically. Someone started shooting at us, so I protected Jasmin and I got shot. That night I went to the hospital. Everyone came to the even the whole football team. I made a very hard decision that day to keep the bullet in and very little movement or take it out with surgery and I might be paralyzed on my whole left side. I thought long and hard and I took the surgery. After surgery I couldn’t move my arm. They tested it. I wanted to take it again and my arm began to move. The doctor said “You should be fully recovered in two months and we’ll do some check-ins. You can also do minimal stretches.” I was so happy I wasn’t paralyzed and only two months that gives me time to practice plays for our last game of the season. Two months later,with my dedication to get better and stronger faster, I was able to play our last game. We won the game and I got the scholarship. My dream came true with a little hard work and determination. You can do anything even when something bad happens. ... Purchase answer to see full attachment