Fluent Essays

Finish work Name:   Yan Shuai 625958     Please note:    The Learning Coach meeting is an opportunity for you to improve your work. That means:    1)    You should not wait till the meeting to begin working on the task. Instead, before the meeting, you should try your best to finish the task by following the instructions from class. Based on your completed task, Learning Coach will be able to try his/her best to check and comment on your work.    2)    Also, after the learning coach meeting, you should revise your work based on the coach’s comments.    This is how you should use the learning coach meeting wisely to improve your assignment and maximize your grade.                      Worksheet 1    Planning my Personal Response    NOTE: Please read the essay assignment sheet carefully BEFORE filling out the worksheet. Then answer the questions below here. Pretend the worksheet below is a conversation with your instructor.       My Prompt (reading chapter) is:  1 (   Your life story defines your leadership      )       Part 1: Thesis Key Word & Paragraph Key Words      In your opinion, what is the most important thing that you learned in this chapter? Write your answer below.   Try to summarize this main idea with one word (or one expression). This will be your thesis key word.   Note: “True North”,” authentic leadership”, or Chapter title are NOT acceptable.      My Thesis Key Word (one word or one expression) is:     Focus on yourself will become greater     TKW   Can you think of two specific aspects of your above main idea (thesis key word) from the chapter? (i.e. what are two specific things in the chapter you noticed that prove your idea above is important). These will be your paragraph key words. Try to limit the aspect to 1 word each if possible.       My Paragraph Key Word 1 (aspect 1 for the first body paragraph) is:   Keep learning      My Paragraph Key Word 2 (aspect 2 for the second body paragraph) is: self-reflection      Part 2: Thesis statement   Use the thesis key word and paragraph key words from above, and follow thesis formula as below, write your thesis statement for the personal response essay.    Follow the formula below to write your thesis statement:   (Thesis key word) revealed in Chapter (          ) of True North (reaction) through: (paragraph key word 1), and (paragraph key word 2)       My Thesis Statement is: Focusing on self will improve leadership revealed in Chapter 1 of True North  (reaction)  through: Keep learning  and  self-reflection  CP p.26           Part 3: Evidence for Body Paragraphs (Important quotes)   Think about the two aspects (paragraph key words) you wrote above.  Can you find a “quotation” from the chapter that represents each of your ideas? These quotes will be the evidence in your body paragraphs.      Quote 1 from the reading chapter (for aspect 1 in first body paragraph) is: Kovacevich was raised in a working-class family and interacted with people of all incomes and education levels. The dairy farmers. loggers, and workers that he knew at the local Weyerhaeuser sawmill were intelligent people who worked hard and had high ethical standards but lacked college educations. His teachers had a tremendous influence on him, encouraging him to do well academically and go to college.          Quote 2 from the reading chapter (for aspect 2 in the second body paragraph) is: We need to recognize our weaknesses, but not amplify them, and then surround ourselves with people whose strengths complement our weaknesses.             Part 4: Comparative Response for one of the two body paragraphs.   Consider the two aspects/quotations you wrote above.  For one of the two, can you think of a public leader that represents this idea? This person can be a famous historical personality, a politician, business person, or celebrity. This leader should not come from your prompt (the book you are reading) or be someone you learned about in leadership class. It should be someone you know about from your previous education, experience, or knowledge of the world.   Who is the public leader that represents one of two aspects you wrote above?    Ren Zhengfei      What is the online source for this public leader?   ·      Paraphrase in your own words how this public leader can represent your idea (3-4 sentences):          Ren Zhengfei was born in a small village in Guizhou. There are 6 brothers and sisters in the family. His father is a rural teacher, so he attaches great importance to the education of Ren Zhengfei. Even if the family is very difficult, he still provides Ren Zhengfei to the university, which has laid the foundation for his subsequent success.  ·      Reference: Sherisse Pham.(2019,March 14).Who is Huawei foundei Ren Zhengfei.CNN Business          https://edition.cnn.com/2019/03/13/tech/huawei-ren-zhengfei/index.html                            -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------   Worksheet 2   Personal Response Body Paragraph   The purpose of this worksheet is to complete one body paragraph of your essay step-by-step using the course pack instructions.   My Thesis Statement is:   Focusing on oneself revealed in Chapter 1 of “True North” draws my attention to how to cultivate leadership through the following aspects: keep learning and self-reflection.    FOLLOW CP p. 29 and 31         ASSERTION:    Write your assertion below.  This should be only one simple sentence. Please don’t forget to use the thesis key word and paragraph key word as they are written in your thesis.       My assertion for body paragraph 1: Keep learning is revealed in “Your life story defines your leadership” through the Dick Kovacevich’s experience. QUOTE “...”  Focusing on oneself highlighted in “True North” draws my attention to how to cultivate leadership by keeping on learning        My assertion for body paragraph 2:  Self-reflection is also revealed in “True North” as a way to cultivate leadership with self-focus. Reatha Clark King’s experience.      EXPLANATION:     Write your explanation sentence focusing on explaining your paragraph key word.  Don’t forget to begin the sentence with a transition word/phrase as suggested in the course pack.  This should be only one sentence.       My explanation for body paragraph 1: More specifically, focusing on oneself helps leaders grow by as they keep learning about themselves.        Dick Kovacevich grew up in a working-class family and interacted with people of all incomes and education levels. Dairy farmer. The lumberjacks and workers he met at the local Weyerhaeuser sawmill are smart people. They work hard and have high ethical standards, but they lack university education. His teacher had a great influence on him and encouraged him to achieve academic success and enter university.          My explanation for body paragraph 2:           EVIDENCE:     Share evidence from the prompt that supports your key words.  Don’t forget to introduce with a transition as suggested in the course pack, as well as context for the quotation (i.e. information about what the quote was about, who the speaker is unless the speaker was already introduced).       My evidence for body paragraph 1:    in chapter 1 QUOTE “...”     My evidence for body paragraph 2:           DISCUSSION:     Write your discussion sentences below.  This should include at least three responses, including the comparative response.  Start with an emotional or intellectual response first. Don’t forget to begin the discussion with a transition as suggested in the course pack, and to also include an APA citation/reference for the comparison.  Don’t forget to follow the steps for writing a comparative response as outlined in the course pack.  This should be several sentences.       My discussion for paragraph 1:                            My discussion for paragraph 2:                          CONNECTION:     Write your connection sentence here.  Don’t forget to begin with a transition as suggested in the course pack, as well as include the same key words from your assertion and a summary of what the paragraph discussed. This should be one sentence only.       My connection for body paragraph 1:           My connection for body paragraph 2:        -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------   Learning Coach Checklist (To be checked by instructor or learning coach)   Student must work on the following:   ·       Paragraph Pattern:   ·       Key Words:   ·       Transition Words:   ·       Evidence:   ·       Discussion:    ·       Others (Please specify)                                                                                                                     S. Zhou Personal Response Review, Practice, Example The prompt for the example: • Video “In the shadow of Gold Mountain” • Link: https://www.nfb.ca/film/in_the_shadow_of_gold_mountain/ Topic: Chinese immigrants What does the video show you?=Thesis Key Word racism Aspect 1 of Thesis Key Word =Paragraph 1 key word: social segregation Aspect 2 of Thesis Key Word =Paragraph 2 key word: school bullying Evidence (quotation from the video): 10:58: Roy Mah, a son of a Head Tax payer, “we couldn’t vote in the election time. We weren’t allowed to enter public facilities like city- owned swimming pool and city-owned golf courses. So Chinatown was our entire universe” Evidence (quotation from the video): 12:40 Gim Wong, a son of a Head Tax payer, “three boys chased me and I fell down and they peed on me” Emotional Response: sympathy, sadness… Emotional Response: Anger, sympathy… Intellectual Response: Chinese immigrants were not treated fairly (role of government) Intellectual Response: Chinese students should not be bullied by white students (role of parents and school). Comparative Example Response * (researched and cited) Jim Crow laws in the United States https://www.ferris.edu/jimcrow/what.htm Personal Experience Response A friend of mine was verbally abused in a bus station S. Zhou Response Body Paragraph Pattern (Detailed) Transition word/phrase (“also” if it is the second paragraph or beyond) Assertion: State what the paragraph will discuss/prove with the thesis key word (overall reaction) and a paragraph key word (aspect of the overall reaction) from the roadmap. Transition word/phrase (In more detail, More specifically, In other words) Explanation: Explain the assertion in more detail, focusing on the paragraph key word as it relates to the prompt, perhaps using some detail from the situation described by the prompt. Transition word/phrase (According to, As______states/reports/indicates) Prompt Evidence: More general than evidence below, make sure to introduce with detail from the prompt (i.e. name of the speaker of the quotation or at least the source type), “quote” cite (Last name/organization, Year). Transition word/phrase (With this in mind, Considering this, This indicates that, Clearly, In other words,) Discussion: Explain in your own words how the evidence proves the relationship of the key words for the assertion/thesis using a variety of the four types of response. Follow the specific guidelines for creating appropriately detailed comparative/personal experience responses. i.e. With this in mind, this causes me to feel (emotion) because… (Emotional response) In my opinion, (Intellectual response) Another idea is that… (intellectual response) In comparison/In my experience, (Comparative or PE response) Please note: the above is an example only—the responses you choose can/should vary for each paragraph. For instance, one paragraph should have a Comparative response, the other should have a PE response. This section is Transition word/phrase (In addition, For example, Moreover, For instance) + (According to, ______states/reports/highlights/suggests that) optional for Evidence: More specific evidence from the prompt, or related researched evidence (introduced with sufficient context, paraphrase or “quote”, cite) the Personal Transition word/phrase (Clearly, This suggests/reveals/means/highlights that, For this reason, With this in mind, In my opinion, When I reflect on this,) Response Discussion: Explain in your own words how the evidence proves the relationship of the key words and from the assertion/thesis and ALL the evidence Assignment above using the different types or response. Can/should be more than one sentence Transition word/phrase (Therefore,/Thus,/Hence,/Consequently,) Connection sentence: Using Thesis key word (overall reaction) and the paragraph key word (aspect of the overall reaction) from the roadmap (same key words from the assertion), summarize in one sentence how the paragraph proved the assertion/thesis. S. Zhou Thesis statement: Racism revealed in the video “In the Shadow of Gold Mountain” reminds me that immigrants’ life filled with unimaginable harshness and sacrifice, through the following aspects: social segregation, and school bullying. Body paragraph 1: Racism is revealed in the video “In the Shadow of Gold Mountain” through the aspect of social segregation. In other words, Chinese immigrants were forbidden from participating in many social activities in public places. In the video, Roy Mah who is a son of a Head Tax payer recalls his life was being confined, “We couldn’t vote in the election time. We weren’t allowed to enter public facilities like city-owned swimming pools and city-owned golf courses. So Chinatown was our entire universe” (Cho, 2004). This make me feel sympathy for Roy and those who were treated the same because it is unfair to single out them based on their race. In my opinion, a community is a place for everyone who resides there regardless of one’s race. In particular, every member of a community, including Chinese immigrants, is entitled to share into the use of a public area, facilities and services. The restrictions on Chinese immigrants reflected Canadian officials biased attitudes and behavior preferring white Canadian. The race and the color of skin shouldn’t be a factor for authorities to decide whether one is allowed to share the public services. Another idea is that these restrictions could possibly frame Chinese immigrants as an unwelcomed and unwanted ethnic group in Canada. As a result, Chinese immigrants could face further challenges in their livelihoods. In comparison, this reminds me of the enforcement of Jim Crow law in the United States. About five decade ago, United States passed the Jim Crow law to separate almost all societal activities between African American and White American. It was an anti-black law that positioned African American as inferior to White American. African Americans were not allowed to join the White American in many aspects of daily life, such as separate cars and parks (Pilgrim, 2012). This is similar to what Roy mentioned that Chinese immigrants were not allowed to join White Canadian in the public places. Race is the reason that they suffered from being ruled out from the mainstream society. Thus, social segregation that Chinese immigrants experienced reveals racism in the video because they were unfairly singled out from social activities in public places. Body Paragraph 2: S. Zhou Racism against Chinese immigrants is also revealed in the school bullying. Repeat steps 2-5 (explanation, evidence, discussion, connection) and include a personal experience response instead of comparative example response in the discussion.